Answer:
Explanation:
Its pretty good, I would reccommend that you should change
"The echoes of demise reverberate throughout my ears." to "The echoes of demise reverberate in my ears."
"I have slash open my enemies, " to "I slash open my enemies"
"The scarlet hue of their corpses bows before me, " to "the scarlet hue of their corpses bow before me"
"But darkness’s claw clutches hold of my eyes, " to "But darkness’ claw clutches my eyes, "
"The coldness of the steel penetrates my muscles," to "The steel's coldness penetrates my muscles,"
also I don't really know what the And line is for.
