Question

Can someone help analyse my poem? Please bear in mind it is written by an 8th grader.

Answer 1

Answer:

Explanation:

Its pretty good, I would reccommend that you should change

"The echoes of demise reverberate throughout my ears." to "The echoes of demise reverberate in my ears."

"I have slash open my enemies, " to "I slash open my enemies"

"The scarlet hue of their corpses bows before me, " to "the scarlet hue of their corpses bow before me"

"But darkness’s claw clutches hold of my eyes, " to "But darkness’ claw clutches my eyes, "

"The coldness of the steel penetrates my muscles," to "The steel's coldness penetrates my muscles,"

also I don't really know what the And line is for.