From the start, I dislike it due to the formatting. Never write Introductory, Body, Conclusion. It's one essay, not an executive summary. In your introduction, you do not have a clear thesis. Although "Yay! And the..." may seem witty, it comes off more as silly. I actually like the first sentence of your second paragraph "For as long...before academics." as a better thesis. Remember that your introduction introduces your essay.
I would give your examples through a third person narrative. You want to approach your argument from an unbiased perspective and that means not say "I believe". Yes, we understand that this is your viewpoint, you're the person writing this essay, right? :P
In your body paragraphs, all I can say is make your ideas more consise and then explain why they are relivant. You may need to get some better examples. Why are these examples important? Why should the reader care? Don't use trigger words like "many" or "a lot", but rather give exact examples and numbers.
With the conclusion, whoever taught you that it OK to start a sentence with "But"?! Your English teacher should know better than that. :P
If I were you, I would proof read your work. There are a few grammatical errors that need to be fixed and some things that should be reworded.
Hope that was of some help to you! :)
Answer:
B
Explanation:
The reason to support the B choice relies on the fact that this part of the declaration gets into transfering the idea that those who have written the document have gone through unfortunate situations that may be labeled as unfair, so the "Pathos" can actually apply to this text for the writer's indirect invitation to feel compassion for the others.
Answer:
Her experience as a teacher helped her understand that just talent wasn't enough to be successful , hardwork was important too.
Explanation:
- Angela Duckworth was teaching math when she noticed a behavior in her students.
- The successful students weren't the ones who had a natural aptitude, but the one's who worked hard. They displayed a quality she called-grit.
- Later with the help of a graduate student of psychology at the University of Pennsylvania, she coined the term grit-combination of passion and perseverance for a singularly important goal
- They created a tool to measure it: the “grit scale”.
- Due to her exemplary work, Dr. Duckworth was named a MacArthur “genius” in 2013, and the notion of grit has become widely known.
Answer:
In the poem Grass, Carl Sandburg uses personification
Carl Sandburg personifies the grass because he wanted to make the grass feel human