Read a draft paragraph from an argumentative essay. Using the bomb saved lives by bringing a quick end to a war that might have
gone on for years longer. It is impossible to put a number on how many more deaths the continuing war might have caused, but there are indications. Millions had already died in the Pacific theater. Whenever US troops invaded an island, they knew the fight was to the death. In the battle for Okinawa alone, there had been almost 50,000 US casualties, while Japan had suffered some 90,000 military deaths and at least 100,000 civilian deaths. Of course, radiation continued to cause illness, misery, and death long after the bomb had been dropped. How should the author revise this paragraph
The correct answer to this open question is the following.
The author has to revise this paragraph to make it more powerful and conclusive. He should add a more explanatory paragraph so the reader can get a powerful final idea of what is trying to say.
Those data regarding the number of deaths and victims are all right. However, the author needed to include some comparative references similar to the data included, but now, as the tragic consequences of having launched the nuclear bombs over Hiroshima and Nagasaki. This means, not only opinions or already known consequences but facts, data, numbers, statistics, quantitative information that can be compare3d with the "advantages" of having launched the bombs.
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