Question

Please help I will mark brainliest

Answer 1

First off, your teacher’s comment. Leave out, “honestly.” You can just say, “I feel as though it is getting worse as time goes on.” Make sure you have research, proof, evidence, statements, anything that will show pollution is getting worse and/or better.

Introduction paragraph:

Can you imagine not being able to use clean water on a daily basis? Numerous people around the world don’t have clean water to drink or to bathe in. Industrial water pollution has been a problem for quite some time now, and it has yet to get better. It seems to get worse as time goes on. Because of water pollution, many citizens in the rural areas of China are left with unsanitary water. This water contains large amounts of bacteria. these citizens aren’t the wealthiest, leading them to have a hard time solving this issue on their own.


You’re original introduction paragraph was amazing, just needed some extra punctuation!! Hope this helps!! <3

Answer 2

Answer: Intro- China's water pollution is a result of industrial wastewater discharges, untreated domestic sewage and nonpoint source pollution mainly from agriculture.As China's surface waters are increasingly polluted, not surprisingly its groundwater supplies have been increasingly exploited, particularly in the North.

Explanation: Hope u like the intro and to me about what ur teacher is telling you is that to not put ur opinon(sorry if that sounds rude) in it like make it sound like ur a machin thats writing it if that makes sense sorry im a little bit bad at explaining things