The only wrong ones is the first on and the last one. The first one you forgot to put a comma after but. The last one you forgot to put a comma after eggs, pancakes, and things. I hope this helps you!
In a history book it can be in the review too :)
It would be "The carpenter was suffering particularly, but he showed grit and spirit. Vincent had for the past week ceased to be an active member of the crew, and I could not easily account for his collapse. Physically he was one of the strongest men in the boat. He was a young man, he had served on North Sea trawlers, and he should have been able to bear hardships better than McCarthy, who, not so strong, was always happy."
He could summarize the range of human emotions in verse.
he could tell great stories.
He invented compelling characters.
He had the ability to turn a phrase.
ok so what you want to do is read the story then use beginning middle and end as well as using key words such as: then , first , after, meanwhile , lastly, EXC...... try to piece together the story without telling the story. almost like a long story short. If possible even add some of your thoughts to the summery.
I hope this helps
have a great day
