Uh I think it would be 368685
The argument is ineffective and can be improved significantly. First of all, he writes the claim in the first person. A formal persuasive essay should be in the form of third person. The author can improve his support by using less opinions and back-up his thesis with facts and evidence and does not take a strong stance on the conclusion clincher. The author also does not efficiently connect his essay. There is no cohesion and his diction is weak. He can improve it by using stronger vocabulary.
Preferably not. unless you are doing research on how brains work in the same way your results could be completely different from a depressed moose to a depressed squirrel to a depressed human
21. The (man) [who heeds the word] wisely will find good.
22. The (package) [that is in the hall] is moving.
() = circle [] = underline
I'm like 80% confident on this one, sorry :/
