A. the tone shifts in the last two lines
alley was very hungry after she went on her morning walk
Explanation:
you might wanna try and use she he or a name instead of I .
Answer:
I think you should switch to Sila's POV. One thing that might be fun to add is how she (maybe, theoretically, if you want to) got shivers/goosebumps when Seth helped her out of the pond. Or how she could feel Seth's eyes on her as she fed the ducks. Or how she could sense that he was withholding information about her (the family stuff), she could tell that he was biting his tounge about something. Or a comment on the nickname "prettyboy". I would love to see the car scene, and maybe a sweatshirt could be given to dry <em>someone</em> off. You could describe Seth's car and how it's (pick a quality) reflects or is the opposite of how Seth acts. Another thing about love stories is the smell of someone you like is a smell you like..
Explanation:
i'm honestly very interested in this story and I hope you keep writing it!! :)
Foreshadowing and metaphor because it foreshadows what will happen next (how they both got attacked by bob)
