Answer: Not sure how you're going to copy this down, you might need to re-format but I did find a few mistakes throughout the text (not too many.) You wrote quite an interesting essay :)
Explanation:
(FIRST SECTION)
This method was well established, by
claiming to come to fix their water
system, Mr. Bannon took the
opportunity to extract money with
a check for $500 after this false
performance. Throughout October
2019 and January 2020, seven
retirees were the subject of his
practices in the city of Denver. Mr. Bannon was then identified by people who recognized him.
(QUOTE)
This was the first time something like this happened to me in 60 years...
(SECOND SECTION)
change this sentence,
INCORRECT>"A victim testified and clarified the facts.
"
CORRECT >"A victim testified and clarified these facts.
"
(THIRD SECTION):
"He asked me for a check for $500. When I went to get the check, I found out he had ransacked my closets. He stole $300 and some precious jewelry. Shocked, I didn't know what to do or say..."
(note: I wasn't quite sure if he was currently ransacking her closets while she was in the house or if he ransacked her house and then left, so I can only assume that the sentence was supposed to be in past tense.)
(FOURTH SECTION)
Thus, Mr. Banon also took advantage of the vulnerability of the elderly to steal goods such as paintings, jewels, and pocket money that remained in the house.
(FINAL SECTION)
Today, the criminal charges brought against Mr. Bannon are, trademark counterfeiting (for the use of the Denver city water service trademark) fraud, and theft of the goods. Mr. Bannon faces up to 1.5 years in prison and approximately $100,000 in fines.
