<span>Unconverted
men walk over the pit of hell on a rotten covering, and there are
innumerable places in this covering so weak that they won't bear their
weight, and these places are not seen.</span>
Answer:
If the language used is archaic.
there are some set of words that are being used in the 19th century English and they are easily known because they are now out-dated
A cat in a red and white striped hat entertains children stuck at home on a rainy day.
If I like it: Yes, I like this poem. It seems/feels so intimate, yet somehow I feel connected to the character.
What emotions are there:I believe the emotions a reader would feel would be sorrow, pity, despair, grief, and helplessness because he/she has no power to help the abused.
What I would add to make it better: I probably wouldn't, perhaps start posting it publicly to sites like 'Wattpad', to get a wider perspective from public comments.
