So, I'm not sure if you need a new text or If you want someone to check it, well I found out something that It's grammatically wrong, you repeat the word "luna" two times, so instead of that you can say: Por la noche, contemplaremos las estrellas y la luna y escucharemos algunas historias fascinantes sobre estas, narradas por mi abuela.
And also, you should use more the comma.
If you needed another text, you can text me and I write it for you! <3
