Rainsford needs control of his emotions to overcome his largest conflict, General Zaroff. At first, when he finds out he is goin
g to be hunted, his instinct is to run in a panic, but he stops to look around and get a handle on the situation. Then, when Zaroff finds him hiding in a tree, Rainsford panics again, knowing Zaroff is playing with him. Once more, he controls his emotions and focuses on forming a plan. Even when the general is hot on his heels with a pack of dogs, Rainsford keeps his calm. Clearly, his self-control helps him win the game. Which revision would help expand the ideas in this passage?
adding a clear description of Rainsford’s overall conflict
adding details about how Rainsford panicked during each conflict
adding an explanation of how Rainsford kept his calm while being chased by dogs
A revision that would help expand the ideas in this passage can be adding a clear description of Rainsford’s overall conflict. It would be better to include a backstory or a glimpse of the history and relationship between Rainsford and General Zaroff, and why they had a conflict.
Dr. Livesey's narration adds a sense of plausibility to all the excitement we've witnessed. All the same, Livesey's observations are rather similar to Jim's so there's no significant break in continuity when he picks up the story.
