Your answer is correct, but it would be nice if you made the text more fluid, using more prepositions to link your sentences, and avoiding repetition of words.
<h3>How to do this?</h3>
- Reread your answer.
- Identify sentences that could be joined using prepositions, or commas.
- Try to make substitutions between nouns and pronouns that are reproved a lot.
Below you can see an example of how your answer can be edited.
<em>In the video, Eric Thomas is talking about success in our life, cell phone use, and time spent on trivial things. These issues are highlighted when Thomas says that we need to give up the cell phone for a while because it makes us spend time that could be used to build our success through study and dedication. Thomas points out that this waste of time makes us not know our potentials. That's because many of us claim that we're not good at math, but don't take the time to study it. The same goes for people who say they are not good at writing, but never take the time to try to write something because they spend their time on super fun activities like cell phones, parties, games and others. Thomas says that we have to dedicate all of us to activities that will promote our success and that implies abandoning certain activities that only distract us.</em>
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