Question

Can you proof read this?

Answer 1

Answer:

Teenagers today often spend a great deal of time playing video games. These games are fun and engaging, but also dangerous. Plus, most young people often feel that playing games is a great thing to do in their spare time. Although good always has bad, basically vice versa. (this sentence does not make sense.)  I would say something like, "Although naturally there are both positives and negatives to this activity".  Some of the outcomes are listed below.

Some advantages of gaming include: it can improve your mood when you are feeling down, and lets you meet new people. Another, is that it decreases the risk of depression. Depression can occur if you have a mental illness, if you worry a lot, and/or lack social interactions. Gaming can also increase your reflexes. For instance, it can improve your sensitivity and advances with multitasking (I would replace this phrase with "ability to multitask")

However, you shouldn’t spend too much time gaming because it can cause damage to your eyes. The blue light from your screen releases melatonin from your brain, lowering your aspect of sleep ("aspect of sleep" doesn't make sense. I would replace with "ability to sleep"). Also, the blue light passes through the retina of the eye, damaging the light responsive cells in the retina. Playing for distances (I would replace with "long periods") of time can construct (change to "cause") an addiction and create lack of exercise which will cause problems later in life.

I personally believe gamers should set a time limit on a game to help reduce the risk of damage. This way, they can enjoy their game and diminish the possibility of health issues. Some people care less about the problems now, but will regret it when they are older. There are real dangers in this world that most people do not know about. Some are right in front of you and you don’t even know it.

I hope this helps!