Read this excerpt from a student's narrative essay and answer the question below. "My friends and I were driving around listenin
g to music, just minding our own business, when suddenly Hayley said she saw something in the sky. She told us to all look over toward the field. She asked if she was seeing things."
How could the writer BEST improve this passage through revision?
A. The writer could cut unnecessary words and details for improved clarity. B. The writer could use dialogue instead of description to bring Hayley and the moment to life. C. The writer could add a sentence explaining the history of teenagers' connections to music. D. The writer could cut the unnecessary information about what the friends were doing when Hayley saw something in the sky.
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