Answer:
This is really good!!
Explanation:
I really enjoyed your writing and I like how you have set this story up!! The story is extremely intriguing and I almost didn't want to stop reading. I love your descriptive language and it makes the story feel alive. The scenarios feel real and its easy to put yourself in the place of Winter (who is an interesting character) and feel sorry for her and her situation. The one thing I think that could help this even more is maybe some even more descriptive words when describing her running away from Cain (she heard every leaf crunch under her feet and cringed at the thought of him hearing her, she felt the cold breeze and stiff air more than ever alone in that tree and she sat in the short amount of safety that was given to her in that moment, she heard Cains manic laugh echo through the forest, ect.). I feel as though this could make that scene even more better than it already is!! :)
I love this idea and your creativity! Keep writing, this will be amazing!!
She’s headed to Georgetown University this fall on a full scholarship. Melson has excelled at her homework — but for the past six years, she hasn’t had a home to do that work in. She currently lives in D.C. General Homeless Shelter along with her mother and two brothers. The shelter houses up to 300 adults and 500children and has come under scrutiny for its poor conditions
Answer:
A vacation?
Explanation:
Make a story about a family going on vacation in cancon but it takes a turn when they find out the house their staying in is haunted by a ghost
My inference is that Negi's father wants to spend more time with his daughter. So at this point he is actually being selfish.
