The answer depends on what your teacher believes, but I believe that it would most likely be true.
For the first red, you don't need an article before "relationship".
When you're saying "type of [word]", do not put any article before that word.
Example: "a type of device"
Not too sure about the "your back" parts. It could be your teacher does not like repition.
Also not too sure about "did". He probably wanted you to use the word "felt" instead of "did feel"
The first word of the last paragraph should be "in" not "at".
The red commas definitely do not need to be there.
Don't know why he marked "time to" and "to" red.
True -- also called the denouement, revelation or catastrophe
It basically means that the rubric has criteria that can be generalized for different tasks
