Hello!
I don't find the paragraph to be too wordy at all. I don't understand the entire context of the paragraph, only because I don't know the topic that it is written on. Despite this, I was still able to follow the meaning of the paragraph.
Something that I did notice is that you have one run-on sentence in your paragraph. You wrote "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture, she photobombed a family picture, they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original and didn't want her in it, she cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"
Instead, you could reword it into multiple different sentences to make the idea complete. I would recommend you turn this section into: "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture. She photobombed a family picture and they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original one and didn't want her in it. She cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"
I hope this helps you! Have a lovely day!
- Mal
Answer: Finishes
Explanation: 3rd person present: finishes
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They both illustrate the Baroness' inconsiderate and selfish nature. 8. At what point in the story do the wolves begin to howl?
Explanation:
I just made this up, I'm not sure if it's what you meant, but ....
Thomas had warned me that winter ... he called out to me from the side of the frozen lake. "You're skating on thin ice!" I was too prideful to listen. I had been trying to win a bet. To make a long story short, I ended up six feet below the surface, as dead as a door nail.
Now, three months later, I sadly watch over my friend as he sets his own clothes on fire, with tears streaming down his face. I hear a child's voice some distance away saying, "Mommy says that where there's smoke there's fire!"
'They're too late ... Thomas is already going to be with me ... just a few more seconds,' I thought, smiling sadly. Changing someone's fate is easier said than done. He uttered a strangled cry, then fell to the ground, engulfed in flames.
I’m pretty sure It’s B true.
