Answer:
This seems fine it just needs to be revised (grammar wise)
Explanation:
Hello Professor,
This is ___, I rewrote the essay and would like to know if I can resubmit it. If not, by any chance can I do some extra credit work to recover my score?
Thank you,
____
I conclusion paragraph always start with a word Thus, I conclude, Therefore, and many more. Avoid beginning with an unnecessary, overused phrase such as "in conclusion" and "in summary" or "in closing". I hope you are satisfied with my answer and feel free to ask for more
<span>The answer is poetic diction i believe</span>