OVERALL GRADE: 3 ; too many grammar mistakes.
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<em>Hook:</em> Change it to: "Breakfast, anyone? How about more sleep and better grades? These seem appealing, right? These are just a few benefits of school convening later in the day."
<em>Claim/Thesis:</em> Change it to: "The school day should begin at 9:45 AM because it would allow students additional time to prepare for their school day; they would be better rested, perform better, and engage more in physical activities."
<em>Evidence/Reasoning #1:</em> Change it to: "After all, students' brains are still asleep when it's early in the morning. Schools that start at 9:00 AM or later allow students the opportunity to get the recommended amount of sleep [8.5 - 9.5 hours.]"
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Hansel and Gretel is about a young brother and sister kidnapped by a witch who is into cannibolism. She lives in a house made of gingerbread, cake, confection, candy, and many other treats and pastries.The two children end up escaping alive by outsmarting her.
