The comma should go after the word "Saturday" in this sentence. It should go here because a comma can be used to separate two ideas in a sentence. The first idea in this sentence is the speaker's mother and father practicing the viola with the Cleveland Orchestra, and the second is the speaker staying home to practice the violin.
For a topic sentence, or the beginning sentence that signifies the main idea of the paragraph, you could focus on the fact that there are a variety of things to do at the beach (perhaps the 3rd sentence). To create a hook, or an eye-catching sentence, you can use the childhood memory of learning to swim, but perhaps in more detail. In other words, recreate the scene rather than just saying it was a happy memory (i.e. I'm five years old and am amazed by how weightless I feel in the water). Once you create the hook and topic sentence, you can talk about other activities at the beach as your supporting evidence.
<span>I’m
assuming this is the excerpt:</span>
"I
got there it was all still and Sunday-like, and hot and sunshiny—the hands was
gone to the fields; and there was them kind of faint dronings of bugs and flies
in the air that makes it seem so lonesome and like everybody’s dead and
gone…"
The
figurative language used is:
<span>b. personification
</span>
In
the excerpt, the bugs and flies were personified to be droning in the air.
Personification is when nonhuman subjects are given humane attributes.
