"A light fog settled over the dark forest, making it seem like the ghosts of trees had decided to settle atop the sky brushing mountains. The pale morning light peaked through the haze of white, and though many would have thought of this as the perfect day to avoid the elements, Quinn Farley had decided otherwise. He allowed the sweet smell of pine needles and mist to circulate through his body, seemingly clearing a fog of worries and anxiety from his head. Quinn grasped the small bag he had slung over his shoulder and marched through the puddles of water from last nights rain. He allowed himself to stare momentarily into one of the pools, his honey blonde hair stuck out at odd ends and completely failed to complement his face. He had coffee colored eyes and olive skin, with a small river of freckles that swam over his nose"
Here's a little starter, good luck on your writing!!! :)
Answer:
<h3>I would change :</h3>
- the country
- to strict parents
- and come before my brother
Yes that usually what they test you on and use more descriptive words.
"Martin! Didn't I tell yeah to clean them dishes!? Why in the he'll did you leave my coffee cup!?" yells mother. I'm Martin, 17 years old, and currently getting yelled at for forgetting to wash one dish out of many. I'm a college student, just started last month. I wash the stupid cup and march upstairs to my room and blast some Joji, drowning out everything and everyone, even my own breathing. I have this stupid essay I need to rewrite, due to "lack of ordered events". Lack of order of events my as. I wrote it based on real-life events, and I get a 65 for "lack of ordered events"? B.S. I am then interrupted from my own thoughts when auntie Claud walks in. "Causing trouble AGAIN Martin? Aren't you a bit too old for this?" She says as she holds a beer bottle in her left hand.
"Shouldn't you be saying that to your sorry-excuse-for-a-sister?" I snap. She shrugs and walks away. I can hear her tumbling over her own feet down the hall. I sigh. "Why is the world so weird." I say out loud, as a statement rather than an question. I grab my Stranger Things Netflix and Chill Limited Edition pen and write this stupid essay.
I believe not partial, correct me if i’m wrong
