"exaggeration,extravegance" hopefuly that helps
Honor Is The Correct Answer
Answer:
Even though this question is missing the options, after analyzing the revision we can safely say it was made for <u>conciseness</u>.
Explanation:
Conciseness can be simply defined as saying a lot in just a few words. Notice how the original paragraph is much longer than the revised one. The writer gave much more information than what was truly necessary. Details such as "and that new procedures need to be initiated" and "who was sympathetic" are superfluous. The first one adds nothing of value. If the procedures are inadequate, it is quite obvious that new ones need to be initiated. Readers could infer that. The second one is permeated with subjectivity, not only making the paragraph longer, but also stating an opinion that in uncalled for in this context. By eliminating the extra words, the writer made the paragraph concise, using fewer words to express the necessary.
No a comma and then an independent clause should follow
I would say many thing from life liberty and pursuit of happiness have come through freedom of newspapers talking about government issues or thoughts many books about openly opinionated articles were allowed from these themes. (I'm not an expert just giving a sort of ideas )
