Read the paragraph from Yasmin’s narrative. I took a long, lingering look at the tremendous beauty that surrounded me. Nature ab
ounded as far as the eye could see, and the only sounds to be heard were the peaceful murmurs of that which existed in the wilderness. As I sat there, my tent and sleeping bag the only signs of civilization for miles, my heart swelled with relief that I had decided to take this weekend camping trip. I could feel every muscle in my body gradually relaxing with every sight, every sound, every smell within this untouched slice of tranquility. Which narrative element would most effectively increase the reader’s understanding of the tranquility Yasmin describes? additional information about why Yasmin chose to camp at that specific campsite
more specific descriptions of the sights, sounds, and smells mentioned by Yasmin
background information about Yasmin’s previous camping experiences and expertise
examples of other instances in Yasmin’s life when she felt so peaceful and relaxed
Yasmin describes that she was camped in a pleasant, quiet and relaxing environment, far from any civilization. This description makes the reader imagine the environment.
However, a deeper description would enrich the mental drawing of the beds on the spot. She could talk about flowers, colors, breezes, scents, animals or any kind of information capable of describing an imaginary that could bring the reader closer to the scene.
