Each paragraph should be five to seven sentences long. It does not matter how long they are, just as long as they aren't micro-sentences.
first, you will need to get your audience's attention. your first sentence will be a sort of "Listen up! I'm about to blow your mind!" it could be a startling statement, a rhetorical question, quotation, a short funny story, or a short dramatic story. Ask yourself this: why should your audience listen? is it relevant to them? How? why should they believe what you say?
the second paragraph should express the need for change. now that you have your audience's attention, you will need to clearly show them what the problem is and the extent of it. in order to do this, you can use examples to illustrate how it impacts them, such as their happiness, future, health, family, neighborhood, Etc. you can use statistics, facts, figures, graphs, and diagrams. just remember to cite your sources and remember to check for credibility! give a good testimony, the more authoritative the better! the goal at the end of this paragraph is to have your audience wanting to hear your solution. they should agree that there's a problem.
the third paragraph should outline your answer or solution and show the audience how it will work. to do this, you need to outline your solution clearly, demonstrate how it meets the problem, and use examples to show how effective it is. you should support it with facts, graphs, testimonies, and you know the drill. :) the outcome of this paragraph is to get the audience to save themselves, "yes. This is possible, practical and sensible."
the end of your speech should give the audience satisfaction.
Good luck! I'm glad to help and answer any questions you may have about this assignment.
The phrase that makes this thesis statement wordy is: electronic mail.
Explanation:
Wordiness refers to making something longer than it should be, that is, using too many words to express something. In the case of the thesis statement we are analyzing here, all words seem to be necessary with the exception of the final phrase. As we know, "electronic mail" is no longer an expression in use. It's been decades since it has been replaced by the shorter version "email", "e" standing for "electronic". Not only does using "electronic mail" make the sentence wordy, it also makes it sound old-fashioned.
In a story, it is essential to maintain a professional relationship in order to ensure that the story is perfectly executed. However, in situations whereby there is a casual relationship between two or more of the characters, they will a series of unexpected events during the execution of the story and can even disrupt the execution of the story.
