Nick and daisy are cousins
daisy says “i’m glad its a girl...”
the valley of ashes is a barren area separating east & west egg
The tense is all mixed up, but it looks like present is used most often, so "emitted" should be changed to "emits" and "pulled" should be changed to "pulls." I can't see the entire paragraph so just make sure that's consistent.
You don't need a comma in "running towards us with the fire extinguisher."
"Your mother and me" should be "Your mother and I." For reference try taking our "your mother" - it sounds pretty silly to say "me thinks" unless you're in the 1600s, right? And it should be "think" instead of "thinks."
Answer:
"a new trade has been opened in a surrey since the completion of the south-western railway"
Explanation:
You have to consider yoir audience in order to decide wht type of writing you're going to do, possibly what arguments to make, and what style you write your piece in. who you are writing for really makes your writing what it is.
