roaring (adjective): 1. making a continuous loud deep noise. 2.(of a fire) burning with a lot of flames and heat.
thawed (verb): to become, or make something become, a normal temperature after being very cold.
outwitted (verb): to defeat somebody/something or gain an advantage over them by doing something clever
satisfaction (noun): the good feeling that you have when you have achieved something or when something that you wanted to happen does happen; something that gives you this feeling
For starters the format is different. Also the structure of the writing is different in an business format writing would be formal whereas the writing for an argumentative essay would be more informal. Hope this helps:))
I think it's an AMAZING story. You just need to fix some grammatical problems in the 2nd paragraph. Also, it would be great if you made a part two or something. (I want to know the backstory on what happened to Sasha.) Thank you for making an interesting story and for not using a overused ending. Good Luck with editing!
