Read the paragraph. I have been a nurse for twenty years. In that time, I have seen a great number of patients suffer because th
ey did not have health insurance. One of the worst cases was a young mother of two who was diagnosed with early stage skin cancer. Because she could not afford treatment, the cancer spread from her skin to other parts of her body. By the time I saw her for the first time, the cancer had reached her brain and she could no longer be helped. This sort of thing should not happen to anyone. A strong universal health care system could prevent instances like this from occurring. What makes this appeal from the paragraph convincing? I have been a nurse for twenty years. It uses proven data as evidence. It appeals to the reader’s emotions. It shows the writer’s credibility. It reveals important statistics.
Explanation: You shall use more detail and more expression for example how you felt when you had seen your patient getting worst. Explain why was it the worst to you as the worst or compare it to other patients whom wasn’t so bad.
Zadie Smith had always wanted to dig deeper in her father's war experience, but she never had enough courage to ask him, and neither did he.
One day, Zadie finds herself visiting an American poet friend in Normandy. And when they were visiting the beach there, she realized that it might be the place where, 59 years before, her father landed upon. So, she mentions this to her friend, who was also interested in war history of the area, and as a consequence, Zadie is interrogated by this friend. But in the end, Zadie relaizes she knows nothing about his father's war experence.
After this event, she returns home and feels determined to start interviewing his father.
