4. In 1854, Cyrus West Field conceived the idea of the telegraph cable and secured a charter to lay a well-insulated line across the floor of the Atlantic Ocean. Obtaining the aid of British and American naval ships, he made four unsuccessful attempts, beginning in 1857.
it's wrong, and part of premature sexualising of young girls. There may be some good things that girls learn from this, but they learn a whole lot more bad stuff, like excessive vanity, a money hungry attitude, and the backstabbing and cattiness that often goes on among the mothers.
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Extends the life of products
Promotes enviornmental sustainability
Reduces cost
Raises awareness of different types of fruits and vegetables
Minimise pathogenic bacteria
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Here are my suggestions on what you should edit:
Should cigarettes be illegal? Smoking can cause lung cancer, strokes, and many other diseases. Diseases caused from smoking are one of the most preventable in the US. In the States, more than 480,000 deaths occur a year due to smoking related illnesses. Smoking should be made illegal to protect our health.
I changed it up because you need more variety in your diction (wording), and also the phrasing could be slightly improved. When you wrote "In the US, more than 480,000 deaths occur a year due to cigarettes" the phrasing didn't make much sense. You don't die from a cigarette. You die from diseases that are caused from regular smoking.
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A synthesis<span> is a written discussion that draws on one or more </span>sources<span>. It follows that </span>your<span> ability to write syntheses depends on </span>your<span> ability to infer relationships among </span>sources<span> - </span>essays<span>, articles, fiction, and also nonwritten </span>sources<span>, such as lectures, interviews, observations.</span>
