Example of a sentence that most needs to be revised because it's description is too vague is : we hike two miles uphill in the blooming forest.
Usually, you hike on the mountain not in the blooming forest.
hoep this helps
Love , because Romeo and Juliet are showing you how dangerous love can be , and how violent. At the end when Juliet kills herself because she thought Romeo was dead shows that they were loyal to each other but it also shows that they didn’t use their emotions the right away and they both acted before thinking.
You should add it all, just in fragments. For example (this is not relevant in any way, but:)
red capes, keep sun off skin.
Just keep it short and sweet, as long as you understand it who cares.
