These lines convey a tone of anticipation for change
This is a skewed left, because it has a long left tail.
From the start, I dislike it due to the formatting. Never write Introductory, Body, Conclusion. It's one essay, not an executive summary. In your introduction, you do not have a clear thesis. Although "Yay! And the..." may seem witty, it comes off more as silly. I actually like the first sentence of your second paragraph "For as long...before academics." as a better thesis. Remember that your introduction introduces your essay.
I would give your examples through a third person narrative. You want to approach your argument from an unbiased perspective and that means not say "I believe". Yes, we understand that this is your viewpoint, you're the person writing this essay, right? :P
In your body paragraphs, all I can say is make your ideas more consise and then explain why they are relivant. You may need to get some better examples. Why are these examples important? Why should the reader care? Don't use trigger words like "many" or "a lot", but rather give exact examples and numbers.
With the conclusion, whoever taught you that it OK to start a sentence with "But"?! Your English teacher should know better than that. :P
If I were you, I would proof read your work. There are a few grammatical errors that need to be fixed and some things that should be reworded.
Hope that was of some help to you! :)
Answer:
His soul
Explanation:
He says that he hopes that he won't become someone he isn't.
Having a negative impact of the luxurious lifestyle of the Nazis in Germany, he gained weight and therefore lost the race.
<u>Explanation:</u>
In Germany, Nazi officials and Adolf Hitler had a very luxurious lifestyle. They did not work for the betterment of the people rather enjoyed their place and position. They had the luxuries that they wanted to enjoy and had a carefree attitude towards the welfare of the people.
Being a part of this lifestyle, when Louie came to Germany for Olympics, he was made to eat a lot and he also enjoyed city tour. He had fun and as a result of this he gained weight and could not run properly in the race. Therefore he lost.