I'm assuming the sentence fragment is "After I play soccer". You would follow that with a comma, then "I", then a description of what you did after you played soccer.
Explanation:
why hospitalized? choking? poisoning?
what age group should avoid this product under 2?
what is wrong with the paint? doors it contain lead? does it chip?
these are needed because they help the reader understand the risks.
example rewrite:
"Consumer Risk: Buddy Blocks"
A new product on the market, Buddy Blocks, poses serious risks to children. The blocks can break
easily causing a choking hazzard. Some children have even had to be hospitalized. The paint used on the blocks
is also unsafe as it contains high levels of lead. It has caused illness in several young children. children under the age of 2 should especially avoid playing with these blocks. The national consumer product panel is considering
removing this toy from the market because of the problems it has caused.
Shift in line 4 ("but")
Tone is something like humble, questioning...
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