Question

HELP PLEASE ASAP!! :)

Answer 1

1) The improvement which was done to the bolded section in the sentence to make it correct is : Repetitive words were replaced with synonyms and pronouns. As it shown in the example, there is no need to duplicate the subject 'father' as it is clear to which word the pronoun 'he' relates. We always try to enrich our speech, so it's better to say the same thing in synonymous form:hates is replaced with dislikes - all in all it sounds good, looks natural and preserves the meaning of the first sentence. 
2) The sentence which should be revised to eliminate redundancy is With a prediction of a deadly storm season, the alert system is needed immediately. A redundancy in a sentence is when something is repeated for no reason, when there is obvious detail that brings no sense and can be omitted. From the first sentence we know that  sirens were needed, so there is no need to repeat that. 
3) The statement which best describes how this sentence can be made more concise is : It has a phrase that can be converted to reduce wordiness. The phrase from which the sentence is started is quite long, and according to its meaning, there is a better (shorter) equivalent, which is 'if'. Now it is concise : If spy a tornado, go and seek shelter in a dark room that has no windows.