Question

Now that you've spotted the problems of shift of person and shift of number, revise the paragraph by removing these inconsistencies. Rewrite the paragraph, maintaining consistency by using first person plural when referring to the readers, and third person plural nouns and pronouns in referring to those being judged. In the story, "The Valiant Woman" by J. J. Powers, we find that in judging people we overlook most of the characteristics that draw us to him, but we do so without realizing it. You can draw inaccurate conclusions about a person by misjudging their facial expressions, their physical stamina, and their obvious personality traits. When people are blinded by false superiority, they judge a person incorrectly because they fail to see them as they really are.

Answer 1

Answer:

Paragraph rewritten with consistency: " In the story, "The Valiant Woman" by J. J. Powers, we find that in judging people we overlook most of the characteristics that draw us to him (them), but we do so without realizing it. You (we) can draw inaccurate conclusions about a person by misjudging their facial expressions, their physical stamina, and their obvious personality traits. When people (we) are blinded by false superiority, they (we) judge a person incorrectly because they (we) fail to see them as they really are."

Explanation:

To generate consistency in the above passage, you must keep the message linked to a single narrative, keeping pronouns fixed to something or someone. For this it is necessary that you when speaking with readers always use the pronouns "we", "us", while, when referring to the people being judged, always use the pronouns "they" and "them". In this way the passage will show consistency, as shown above.