More specific descriptions of the sights, sounds, and smells mentioned by Yasmin.
Explanation:
This passage provides a large amount of details that show us the type of tranquility that Yasmin is enjoying in this camping trip. She talks about the setting, the things that surrounded her, and the way she reacted to this calm environment. However, if she wanted us to have an even clearer understanding of the tranquility she feels, Yasmin could include even more specific descriptions of the sights, sounds, and smells.
