My sweet,quiet father surprised us with his outburst yesterday
Your only describing the father with 2 words. A comma is only necessary if you were using 3 words
He convicted her of dancing in the forest at night with other girls.
We can arrive at this answer because:
- Reverend Parris is a very traditional man who wants to keep his and his family appearances up to society's standards.
- This includes keeping to puritanical concepts and moving away from everything that religion deems wrong. That was essential to his reputation.
- Dancing in the forest at night was considered incorrect as it referred to pagan cults and activities associated with witchcraft.
- For that reason, when Reverend Parris found out that his niece was dancing the night away in the forest, he reprimanded her strongly.
He did this because his niece could be associated with witchcraft and that would cause his reputation to be damaged.
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Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box 342, and as a result, firefighters were directed to an incorrect location during the Chicago fire of 1871.
This is the best example of adding concrete details. It specifically says which alarm box Schaffer told his assistant. The original sentence makes it seem as the miscommunication was the big problem. While it was a problem, the fact that the firefighters went to the incorrect location is really the reason the Chicago fire of 1871 was so devastating. Including these details makes the writing much clearer and easier for the reader to follow.
I think the most strongest traits in a persuasive essay: is organization, a voice, and word choice.
