change "the government" to "a privatized bioengineering company"
Explanation:
Changing the statement that Dr. Jordan received funding from the government to the statement that she received funding from a privatized bioengineering company, would make her story more plausible. This is because as a Bioengineer in the same field, it is easy for her efforts to be recognized by the Bioengineering company who also shares similar goals and objectives with her.
This does not rule out the fact that it is impossible for her to have received funding from the government. But the story would be more plausible if the funding came from a privatized bioengineering company for the above-stated reason.
