In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Metropolis, the city council must set aside more funding
for an old folks' home. It's super uncool to ignore a big part of our community. Which revision best maintains an academic style throughout?
A.You don't have to be an expert in local politics to realize the Metropolis City Council should set aside more funding for elderly housing. It's super uncool to ignore a totally big part of our community.
B.In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Metropolis, the city council must set aside more funding for senior housing. It is unfair to ignore a large segment of our community.
C.In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Metropolis, the city council must set aside more funding for senior housing. Dissing a totally big part of our community is problematic.
D.You don't have to be Captain Obvious to realize the Metropolis City Council should set aside more funding for elderly housing. It is unfair to ignore the well-being of a large segment of our community. NEED HELP PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
The correct answer is B. In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Metropolis, the city council must set aside more funding for senior housing. It is unfair to ignore a large segment of our community.
Explanation:
The term academic style refers to the election of words, tone, language, and level of formality that is appropriate for academic papers such as essays or articles. This style is mainly formal which means it avoids the use of contractions and colloquial words; has an impersonal tone that means it does not use the pronouns "I" or "we" or words that express a personal judgment and used mainly sophisticated or technical words to refer to the subject the text is about.
In the case of the sentence the excerpt presented in the question the words "for an old folks' home" and "It's super uncool to ignore a big part of our community" are too informal and also, rely on personal judgements which means they don't have an academic style and because of this, these sections of the text need to be revised. The best way for doing this is to replace them with more formal, sophisticated words that express an idea from an objective point of view which is reflected in option B. "the city council must set aside more funding for senior housing. It is unfair to ignore a large segment of our community". Thus, the option that best maintains an academic style in all the text is option B.
