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Can you please add clarity to my research paper about the first 5 years of Disneyland's history (1955-1959) and make it more organized and less fact-based. and also finish up the conclusion for me plz and thank you!
Who doesn’t want to visit the Happiest Place on Earth? Disneyland, AKA, “The Happiest Place on Earth,” opened on July 17, 1955. Disneyland, which is built on the Disneyland Resort is 160 acres of land. Walt Disney wanted to build Disneyland near his studio in Burbank, however, he realized that the land which he chose was not large enough. After hiring a consultant to help him chose where to build Disneyland, he chose this site in Anaheim. The park adjacent to Disneyland, called, “Disneyland California Adventure Park”, opened in 2001. In its first five years, Disneyland experienced amazing growth and change, which includes how it got 10 million guests only in 3 years, how they went from having 17 rides to 27 rides, and how they expanded their land by adding the Disneyland Hotel.

Disneyland had an astounding development in its first five years that it was open. On the first day of opening, Disneyland had 17 attractions. This includes the Jungle Cruise, Tomorrowland, Autopia, Mr. Toad’s Wild Ride, and the Mark Twain. Admission was invitation-only, however, people were able to easily copy the tickets and instead of there being 11,000 people, there were 28,000 people at Disneyland. This happened because an entrepreneur folded a latter over the park’s fence and charged people $5 to enter.

In the second year of opening Dinseyland’s one-millionth guest was four year old, Elsa Marques. In an interview with Orange County Register, Elsa’s mom said that they were not even headed to Disneyland. However, their family from El Paso, Texas and the kids all really wanted to go which they did. During this year, the Disneyland Hotel opened on a 60-acre site next to the park.

In year three, Disneyland opened 13 more attractions including Tom Sawyer Island and the Skyway. Astoundingly, in only one year, four million more guests had been admitted to Disneyland, meaning that they now had 5 million guests.

In year 4, in 1957, Leigh Woolfenden from Pheonix, Arizona was the 10 millionth guest to be admitted to Disneyland.

In year 5, Alice in Wonderland, Grand Canyon Diorama, Main Street Firetrucks, and the three-masted Sailing Ship Columbia debut and the Disneyland Kennel opens. Lastly, The Matterhorn Bobsled ride became the first tubular steel coaster ever built.

Disneyland has had a huge amount of growth since it first opened in 1955.

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Who doesn’t want to visit the Happiest Place on Earth? Disneyland, also known as “The Happiest Place on Earth,” opened on July 17, 1955. Currently, both Disneyland and the Disneyland Resort is built 160 acres of land. Originally, however, the founder of Disneyland, Walt Disney, wanted to build Disneyland near his studio in Burbank. However, he realized that the land he chose was not large enough. After hiring a consultant to help him chose where to build the park, he chose a site in Anaheim. In 2001, a park was built adjacent to Disneyland and it was named the “Disneyland California Adventure Park.”  

Throughout its first five years, Disneyland experienced amazing growth and change. Some major growth factors was the fact that 10 million guests had visited the park after only 3 years, how they went from having 17 rides to 27 rides, and how they expanded their franchise and land by adding the Disneyland Hotel.

 On its first day of business, the park had only 17 attractions. These included the Jungle Cruise, Tomorrowland, Autopia, Mr. Toad’s Wild Ride, the Mark Twain, and many more. Admission into the park was invitation-only, however, many people were able to easily copy the tickets. A lot of people were also able to buy their way into the park. For example, one entrepreneur folded a latter over the park’s fence and charged people $5 to enter. This allowed 28,000 guests to enter the park. This number was way over the 11,000 people who were invited.  

 In its second year, Disneyland had its one-millionth guest. She was a four-year-old girl named Elsa Marques. In an interview with Orange County Register, Elsa’s mom explained that the family did not originally plan to head to Disneyland. But since the kids really wanted go, their family travelled all the way from El Paso, Texas to visit the park. During this same year, the Disneyland Hotel opened on a 60-acre site next to it.  

In its third year, Disneyland opened 13 more attractions including Tom Sawyer Island, the Skyway, and many more. Astoundingly, four million more guests had been admitted to the park during this year, which meant that Disneyland had admitted 5 million guests overall. In its fourth year, 1957, Leigh Woolfenden became the 10 millionth guest to be admitted to Disneyland. Leigh travelled from Pheonix, Arizona to visit the park.

 In its fifth year, new attractions such as Alice in Wonderland, Grand Canyon Diorama, Main Street Firetrucks, the three-masted Sailing Ship Columbia debut, and the Disneyland Kennel opened. During this same year, The Matterhorn Bobsled ride had been added and it became the first tubular steel coaster ever built.  

Since its grand opening in 1955 to now, Disneyland has had a huge amount of growth and success.