Carolus Linnaeus believed that as animals became more complex, so did their emotions. He was a Swedish scientist and is most often referred to as the Father of Taxonomy. His system of classification of plants and animals is still widely in use today.
I like goldfish too. The golden color, along with the crunch and the way that they taste so salty yet so fake. Mmm
You can tell when he works he is messy, which sets him up as a messy worker, with possible mistakes. It shows that the reason he is messy is that he is focused.
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In general you want to be a bit more concise in forming a thesis statement. Usually you should shoot for between 1 and 2 sentences summarizing your argument in a concise way so that it is easily understandable to the reader. I would take what you have written and look for your main argument and try and put that in 1 to 2 sentences.
