Not meaning to take points but what are you talking to about.
In number 12 (up neatly) is a prep phrase
I could improve on my rhyming
I could improve on my rhyming
And my wording
Answer:
I say yes.
Explanation:
I think it is a good way to start off because it shows the dedication she has to her fathers restaurant, and it explains the restaurant is in a hot spot in New York!