Answer:
Dr. Naismith first planned to bring outdoor games inside, but they were too physical and cumbersome.
Explanation:
Eliminate repeated words.
Other comments:
'Two' is a number. 'Too' means extra or more than expected-- too many, too much, too late. . .
Two should not be too many to count!
Also be careful to use correct verb forms (planned) (were) to express past tense.
Answer:
Mature writing uses broader vocabulary, while immature writing is very descriptive, and often longer.
Explanation:
Mature writing example:
It was obvious that the boy was struggling emotionally.
Immature writing example:
The boy looked very sad, he was crying, and he didn't talk much.
They both get the same point across, but the 1st one sounds way better than the 2nd.
I would say love and death
I think the sound device in this is called a onomatopoeia. <span />
