To improve a conclusion, a writer must bare in mind that it should not address a new topic, that is to say, it has to be a recompilation of the topics already mentioned and developed in the paragraphs, so it has to be a kind of "summary", an overall of the topics and ideas discussed. It should be concise and the reader needs to be know it is the conclusion and you are not going to keep on working on the ideas, so sometimes, it is necessary to include the words "to conclude"/ "to round up"/ "in conclusion" or something similar on order to let the reader know you are about to finish.
I think he may be right. But I have not read the whole thing, so I may be wrong.
I think the incorrect pronoun shift would be the line "<span>before you adopt a pet". I think it should be before one adopts a pet. This is because the sentence started with "It is". The "you" made the sentence very confusing. The second pronoun should be singular, the pronoun you is often denoted as plural and not singular.</span>
Roasted chicken taste better without any sauce because it sets off an explosive mouth watering experience. I hope this works!
Answer: it was a cold windy day.
Explanation: it was not punctuated at all which it should have been
