The tense is all mixed up, but it looks like present is used most often, so "emitted" should be changed to "emits" and "pulled" should be changed to "pulls." I can't see the entire paragraph so just make sure that's consistent.
You don't need a comma in "running towards us with the fire extinguisher."
"Your mother and me" should be "Your mother and I." For reference try taking our "your mother" - it sounds pretty silly to say "me thinks" unless you're in the 1600s, right? And it should be "think" instead of "thinks."
Metaphor is in the lines - "when all at once I saw a crowd a host of golden daffodils. " here an indirect comparison is made between the daffodils and people it's also a personification
