Question

Can someone please replace the highlighted sentence in my paragraph with something a lot more descriptive and poetic.

Answer 1

Answer:

Even just showing up at these protests, and hearing what people affected by what they want change for, is effective. For many, this is not an option, but, we have the ability to do our part by doing pur own research, we can become informed enough on these topics to spread and create change in our own ways.

Explanation:

btw, you're doing great! Your essay is well informative and written, one thing I would suggest is not saying the word allie and "the affected group" so much. You just don't want your writing to sound repetitive. You can google synonyms or even word it a little different. I say this with only positive intentions to help your grade out :) it's hard right now girl school is stressfull and the times we're living in are scary, I know how stressfull school can be, i'm up at midnight doing it alll lol. we're all in the same boat and just have to get through it together! best of luck