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I need input on this vignette:

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I really like that short story, but I do have some advice. I think in the title and the story, you should say "goodbye" instead of "bye", because it sounds more professional, unless of course just "bye" by itself has a significant meaning to your story. Another thing to improve would be adding some names to the story, even if they're not the names in real life. Especially at the end, instead of saying "that girl", adding an actual name would give it a more dramatic effect :)

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Answer:there is nothing I can say but amazing if I could do this I would be more popular so yes it is great keep doing stuff like this you will become an author in no time seriously hope this helps

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