I dont think its correct. the correct version in my opinion is with the point mentioned above.
hope this helps you
Dear Mama,
I am enjoying my new life in California. The buildings are so unique, the culture is amazing! It is completely wonderful. I love the weather, sometimes its a bit cold but overall its nice, a lot of rich people are here as well. Its nice to see their fancy cars! I enjoy sometimes watching out my window and watching all the cars pass by my house, it's so cool to see all the unique ones that drive by. There are so many unique kinds of people! All the shops and restaurants sell all kinds of different items and food. I like being so close to the ocean as well, even if it's quite cold most of the time. The trip to California was amazing as well, we saw so many neat stuff. Landmarks, parks, everything! The food we ate was really good, visited a lot of nice places to eat. It was a little boring sitting in the car, but we passed the time. Anyways, enough about me. Hows the farm? It's wonderful there, as much as I like the life here I would still go back if I could. How have you been? Whats it life without me and my family there? Is it difficult tending to the farm on your own? I have so many questions. I miss you so much! Please write back soon.
- Your Daughter
Direct, direct, indirect, indirect, direct.
Hope that helped :)
