In this excerpt from <em>A World Without Collisions</em>, Sam describes how he dreams the world to be in the future. I think his main idea has good intentions, he feels sorry for those who get hurt in "learning how to live life". He also seems to think that everybody should take control of their lives and don't be just a victim on everything that happens. This way of thinking has good intentions, but it is not always realistic or even easy to do.
First of all, unexpected things happen in life and some are pretty big and sad, and we do not control everything that happens around us. It is true that we can try and control our emotions in order to feel better, but not what happens outside our bodies. The thing is also, we can chose not to be victims, but it is healthy sometimes to embrace the bad feelings to because only by accepting our sadnesses or pains is that we will be able to move forward. If we deny this bad feeling, our bodies will eventually speak for us and show us that we have been hiding important issues that we should face. I agree, we should "dance life like champions", but doing so is also embracing the bad feelings, connecting with them, and get pass through them. We ARE going to get hurt "in all that bumping" and it is ok.
Yes, technically speaking this sentence is properly punctuated, although it should be noted that this is somewhat a matter of style, since there could be a period where the semi-colon is.
In general, an essay should have an introduction (one paragraph), a body (number of paragraphs depends on the topic and how many words it shoud have, but it should have at least 3 paragraphs) and a conclusion (one paragraph).
As for the content, you can write about the topic in general, but it would be easier if you chose a specific example. It can be a true story, or you can make one up, since it is far more important how you write it, than whether it is true or not. One of the easiest examples would be a parent or grandparent.
You could start by saying that a great number of people pass through a persons life and that we look at other peoples behaviour, replicate the things we like and dismiss the ones we don't. Everyone looks up to someone, especially when we are young and impressionable and at different points of our lives we admire different people. If you are writing about a family member, you should say that there was one person that you especially admired and always looked up to. You could write about your early childhood and how impressed you were by that person, how wise/interesting/brave you thought they were. You should mention the things that that peson taught you, how he/she affected the decisions you made. Later, you could write about how you grew up, changed, and how you see things differently, but that person is still your hero and that you wouldn't be the person that you are today without him/her.
