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Serjik [45]
3 years ago
14

PROOFREAD PAPER (100 POINTS) Please improve pacing and flow and grammar.

English
2 answers:
Amiraneli [1.4K]3 years ago
7 0
Before you start ANY essay, include a header (your name, date, class, teacher, etc). Also, Use indentation (or tabs) to indent every paragraph. Your teacher might ask for it to be double spaced, font size 12, and in times new roman. I created a version of your heading in my Attachment.


Other than that, I did like how you would say stuff like "With a flick of a wand, I soon fell under the spell of my next reading adventure" I thought that was extremely cool. Also, You might want to combine a few paragraphs so that your essay isn't too lengthy. Finally, sometimes teachers don't like it when you use lenthy words (like you said "<span>These riveting enigmas led me to the lands of dinosaurs and the mystical world of wizards"). Some teachers see that as a way for people to use up word count, but then again its not completely wrong. Personally, I would use simple words instead of such detailed words that a lot of people might not understand.


I hope this helps, and if you can, can you mark me brainliest please? thanks!</span>
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lesantik [10]3 years ago
7 0
Here's the editted essay. I mostly fixed the formatting to MLA format, and just a few grammar mistakes. Your paragraphs are all long and well thought out, but your conclusion is a little short, so add to that. Also, for future references, try making your sentences a little shorter. Complex sentences are great, but they can sometimes turn in to run-on sentences; be sure to have sentence diversity. Overall, great job on your essay. Good luck!  
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