THIS IS AN AWESOME TITLE BECAUSE IN COVERS HUNDREDS OF THOUSANDS OF EXPEDITIONS THAT WENT BAD. YOU COULD ACTUALLY HAVE AN EXPEDITION THAT WENT BAD EVERY SINGLE YEAR FROM THE BEGINNING OF WHEN MAN KEPT LOGS TO TODAY.

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3 years ago

In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words,

fomenos

I think this paragraph is wrong because it says so many times snow i would changes that and also i will change a few adjectives. The most wrong part is that the paragraph use so many points instead of comas so my passage will be: Playing in the snow was one of my favorites things to do on my childhood, The winter give us more time to have fun. There's so many fun things to do on winter, but so many people find it annoying, Most of the people just want to stay on their home instead of go outside and play with the snow, I'm happy to grew and play with snow

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3 years ago