this is how i would write it:
volunteering can make a huge difference in a town.
mayor lin said, “parks are clean due to volunteers”
overall, community service strengthens a city.
Answer:
One time showed leadership was when I was captain of the soccer team and guided my team to victory.
Explanation:
First of all I was not the elected captain, but the guy who was elected captain was injured and chosen me as his replacement because he believed I was a very responsible person that was fit to do the job. So, when we face the other team I was not even in an attacking position. I was in a defensive midfield position. Therefore, I had sight of all the field, my teammates, and their movements. So, I could provide feedback and real-time instructions to them. Making the defense very tight and managing to counter their attacks.
Answer:
Too much information
Explanation:
There are multiple topics covered in this single passage - radios, cell phones, and television. There's no end goal to what this is talking about, it's all over the place. A paragraph should have a coherent and cohesive topic, which this does not.
Answer:
Although he studied, he still failed.
The stationery and jewelry were displayed at the show.
Explanation:
